INT WAREHOUSE NIGHT
Two middle aged drug dealers one with a eye patch stand angrily face to face
Drug Dealer 1
I haven't got the money for the boss
Drug Dealer 2 (sighs with anxiety)
Oh shi* we are dead we need that money dawg
Drug Dealer 1 (with anger and rage)
Don't worry i will get the money back don't worry
Drug Dealer 2 (with sarcasm)
Well here comes the boss
Drug Dealer 1 (agressively)
Well act normal and shut up make sure you don't give away the fact we don't have that pricks money
Well act normal and shut up make sure you don't give away the fact we don't have that pricks money
Boss shouting (abusive words)
You are a bunch of shit workers like why the hell did you not get the drugs exported i need that to be at columbia PRONTO.
Drug dealer 2 (Calmly asking , with a weak voice)
Boss they didnt appear to be there for the drop off they didn't come.
Boss shouting EXT.
I'll deal with you two later when am back i want my fuc*king money or else.
Drug Dealer 1,2 (together) INT
BASTARD
Drug Dealer 1 EXT
Am off !
Drug Dealer 2
where you going ?
Drug Dealer 1 (No Reply)
(Drug dealer 2 meanwhile goes off to the drop off with the boss and tells the boss whats happened)
Boss EXT OLD ABANDONNED AIRPORT
your joking the hell he did not do that ama find and kill that son of a dog
Drug dealer 2
well we have to do that later now we have to complete this drop off
Boss (pulls out gun and shoots repeatedly at other dealers Including drug dealer 2)
ahahha teaches you motherfuc*ers to double cross me
Drug dealer 1 (Running viciously towards the boss)
Look what you've done too my brother you bastard your gonna pay for this!
Drug Dealer 2 (Pulls out machine pistol and fires at the boss)
Boss (Shoots repeateadly at drug dealer 2)
Airport (Every one dead and the bloody aiport just stayed stationary and tranquil).
Could you please describe the ethnicity of the two drug dealers?
ReplyDeleteYou have written some good dialogue here Heritier, well done. I have added some scene by scene notes to help you to add some detail and polish your script.
ReplyDeleteINT WAREHOUSE NIGHT
You need to describe the warehouse here, and briefly describe what your characters are wearing. You also need to give a brief description of what the boss looks like and what he is wearing.
Boss EXT OLD ABANDONNED AIRPORT
ABANDONED. You need to describe the scene. Think about what the characters are doing at the start of the scene and what the scene actually looks like.
Keep your stage directions separate from your dialogue. If you put a direction in brackets next to the character's name before they speak, only put small gestures or facial expressions. If it is a larger action, write it as a separate sentence on a separate line.
You need to describe your ending in a sentence, not in note form. Think about how you would film it; could you describe the camera shot you would use? Put a little more detail in. Describe how the characters have fallen and where the lie.